First Row - A Sci-fi short story

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Posted 1/13/19 , edited 1/20/19
Hi! I;m fairly new into the community and tbh english is my mother tounge so I excuse in advance for any bad writing. THing is,I Like writing and I'm starting to make some short stories in english in order to improve my skill. This is the first one. Hope you enjoy it and all feedback will be most appreciated!
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Posted 1/23/19 , edited 1/23/19
just to let you know, posting any and all things that aren't officially copyrighted can face plagiarism, that isn't protected under the plagiarism clause and it's pretty much fair game.

it's not a bad story over all, at any given time the story can fall under the cliche department with government related issues back on earth, same with the landing and so forth. in all honesty it's not really original, there's a cartoon of sorts floating about as well as a comic. so, with very little originality it's still a good start and somewhat plagiarized here and there, but you did fair with the grammar, they do have grammar and other helpful free tools as well as paid tools ready made available for download to use, don't forget dictionaries, thesaurus and even English grammar/other self help books still exist in places.
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Posted 1/24/19 , edited 1/24/19
Thanks for the feedback! Honestly I'm well aware of at least a couple ideas I borrowed. this was more of an excercise to test writing than trying to showoff creativity.

And regarding the plagiarism, I know, it's really important (though for this particular thing I'm not really interested) . That's why both novels I'm writing are copyrighted (one for the full version the other for the first manuscript)


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Posted 2/2/19 , edited 2/2/19
Personally, I really enjoyed it. It may not have been wholly original but what on earth is? Not sure, but I haven't seen the footprints bit done before, and I thought that was a nice touch; for me, that set it apart enough for a short story. I also thought it was fairly well-written.
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